When I think about my childhood, which was the optimal one growing up in the countryside, going to a countryside school with my neighbour friends, living with both my parents and our pets, I just get joyful and I don’t think it is because of the romance in the countryside picture. I had the best parents, a good schooling, many friends and hobbies. Those along with what I believe are the main reason that made me a happy kid: I was allowed to be a child.
Some times it feels like we are back with the Greek and early psychologist and their ideas about that children are just small adults, like miniatures. That they don’t need the special stimulation to actually one day become an adult. It is more important how they dress, what kind of music they are listening to, that they been to Thailand at least once and that they are owners of several different videogames which they are incapable to play. If we ever allow them to be children it is in the adult world on our conditions and on our demands. What happened to being outside just playing, imagining, making up the plot and being allowed to be a child in a child’s world?
I am not saying that it is easy being a parent, I can’t judge because I don’t have the experience. Parents want what is best for their children, everyone knows that. I just don’t see why parents and the society are so eager to make the children adults. There are too few years of childhood as it is, and when they are over you have to be an adult for a very long time; the rest of your life. I don’t have the perfect solution, I don’t even know if there is a way back or if we are stuck in this behaviour. My belief is that childhood should be free of pressure and demands, at least the once encouraging the child to be something else than a child. Let’s just help them not to worry about what to wear or what to own to be popular. Let’s instead encourage them to imagine, play, have fun and explore their own little world.
Some times it feels like we are back with the Greek and early psychologist and their ideas about that children are just small adults, like miniatures. That they don’t need the special stimulation to actually one day become an adult. It is more important how they dress, what kind of music they are listening to, that they been to Thailand at least once and that they are owners of several different videogames which they are incapable to play. If we ever allow them to be children it is in the adult world on our conditions and on our demands. What happened to being outside just playing, imagining, making up the plot and being allowed to be a child in a child’s world?
I am not saying that it is easy being a parent, I can’t judge because I don’t have the experience. Parents want what is best for their children, everyone knows that. I just don’t see why parents and the society are so eager to make the children adults. There are too few years of childhood as it is, and when they are over you have to be an adult for a very long time; the rest of your life. I don’t have the perfect solution, I don’t even know if there is a way back or if we are stuck in this behaviour. My belief is that childhood should be free of pressure and demands, at least the once encouraging the child to be something else than a child. Let’s just help them not to worry about what to wear or what to own to be popular. Let’s instead encourage them to imagine, play, have fun and explore their own little world.
Hi there,
ReplyDeleteI loved reading your blog! It reminded me of my own childhood since it was exactly as yours... Awesome! I must say that even if you don’t have children of your own, you really hit the nail - this is exactly how the society is today!
About your text there are some things that I can advice you to think of... I’m not sure if you mean “Some times” or “sometimes”? Maybe both are correct? What I also want you think of is to be consequent of using only short forms (it’s) OR standard forms (it is) in a text. This just got me wondering if these two really are called short/standard form or if it’s something I just made up ;) Anyway, in your text you use both. Let’s take this sentence for an example: “I am not saying that it is easy being a parent, I can’t judge...” Here you begin with using” I am” and” it is” but then shifts to ”can’t”.
Your paragraphing is in my opinion good, the paragraphs aren’t to long or to short, and you handle the same subject through the whole text. If I look at the transitional devices I find you handle them beautifully; the text is easy-read with smooth transitions between the paragraphs. You also catch the reader instantly in the first paragraph with an interesting subject. I find it really hard, though, since I’m not an expert on this commenting thing... Who am I to judge your “mistakes” when I probably do the same ones? But we’re here to learn, aren’t we?
Warm wishes,
Marie
Dear Anna.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your first blog. You are very professional in my opinion! Nice written text, a cute picture and many good and interesting thoughts. I truly agree with you that a child has to be allowed to be just a child.
I think this task is the most difficult one in the whole course! I’m not an expert on writing in English and to give you comments and advice feel rather stupid to me…But I will give it a try.
You have a good topic sentence who leads the reader in to your text and you come back to the sentence several times in the text. Your first paragraph gives the reader a background. But it had been interesting to read something more from your own experiences to be a child. Some good examples what you did when you were allowed to be a child. Maybe you could have done the paragraphs shorter and done some more paragraphs.
I can’t find any big grammatical errors, comeback in May!
Best regards,
Ewa